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I'm Hearing Voices Blogfest
Today, February 8th - Dialogue Introduction: Have two character introduce each other other using only dialogue- no backstory, no internalization, just dialogue between the two. Max 250 words.
Mr. Andrew Miciotto: " I need to be paid, Otis or I cannot continue representing you.
"I've got your money, don't worry about it."
"That's the problem. You've got it. I don't." Andrew replied
"Can you get me off?" Otis asked.
"That's not the point."
"Maybe it ain't your point, but it's mine. You know what happened to the last person said they could help me, but didn't?"
"I don't give a rat's ass. Otis, pay up or get another lawyer."
" I stuck the bitch till she bled to death."
"Damn it, Otis. How many times have I told you , I don't want to know if you are guilty of this crime. In fact I prefer to not know."
"I ain't talking 'bout this case, man."
"Your jail house threats don't scare me. You're just mouthing off like you always do. You're all talk. You can either get right with me of I'm gonna withdraw as your lawyer. Que pas?"
" Now you's insulting my manhood. I've done learned me a few things about the law in here. You dis's me like that again, I'm a sue you for defecation of character."
"Defa--- what- of character?"
"You heard me the first time."
"Yes I sure did, Otis. Shitting on your character. I will not do that. Now you got my money or I'm telling the judge we have a witness problem and I am off your case."
"What witness-we ain't got no witness problem."
"Oh, but we do. I cannot locate Mr. Green and without him I cannot go forward.
Now Click on the Picture and you will be directed to the official site for this blogfest and you can read the entries submitted by the other participants.
Here is a link to my post from Monday: Characters on the couch. It did not post on Monday. I set it up on Sunday night to automatically post to my blog on Monday morning, but I just learned that it did not post.
I don't want to cross either of these two. Great character voices.
ReplyDeleteWonderful voice! This was awesome :)
ReplyDeleteI love the interaction here! So much personality :) Wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteOtis is one scary dude... is he patterned off one of your clients? : )
ReplyDeletegreat lawyer/prisoner banter! nice job!
ReplyDeleteI love snappy dialogue and you have it here!
ReplyDeleteDenise
Oh man! I love it. Such strong dialogue for strong characters. So intriguing. Fabulous job!
ReplyDeleteInteresting dialogue! Both characters sound really tough!
ReplyDeleteOh, I like Otis. Lol Great dialogue between them. I couldn't help but laugh.
ReplyDeleteYou made me smile right away. :) Nice job.
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh, your pictures made me giggle. They added so much to the discussion. Your characters were leaping off the page by the time I finished.
ReplyDeleteThis made me think of the Lincoln Lawyer with Matthew McConaghy. Fun post!
ReplyDeleteThese pics are wonderful! So funny :)
ReplyDeleteAnd I can't believe I wasn't already following you! I thought for sure I was...big mistake on my part! Love the blog! :)
Excellent dialogue. I'm sure as a lawyer you hear funny stuff like this all the time. When I worked as a paralegal, I did, too.
ReplyDeleteGreat development of the scene through the dialogue, it says lots about character and plot without any additional tags and description.
ReplyDelete'Defecation of character'. Best line ever :-)
ReplyDelete*applause*
ReplyDeleteLove the defecation of character.
Great characters and dialogue!
ReplyDeleteDefecation of character. So funny! Sounds interesting, especially since you know that world you're talking about.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Danielle.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by and for hosting this.
ReplyDeleteThank you Angie. I am having so much fun reading all the entries. This was a great idea that ya'll had.
ReplyDeleteJust a little bit, okay a lot. Well he is a combination of about four of my clients.
ReplyDeleteThank you & thanks for stopping by
ReplyDeleteThanks, Denise. Otis was actually created based on several of my clieents.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Leigh
ReplyDeleteThanks & thank you for visiting.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Miranda. I often have to bite the inside of my mouth to keep from laughing when I have similar conversartions with my actual clients. Otis is a combination of several of them.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Margo
ReplyDeleteThank you for your kind comment. I am glad you liked it.
ReplyDeleteThe Mr. Green Part made me think of it as well. Mr. Green ( the phantom witness) is actually a very real conversation that criminal defense attorneys often have with clients who do not want to pay.
ReplyDeleteThank you & I am delighted that you are now following me.
ReplyDeleteI know. I do hear the funniest & most bizarre comments as I am sure you know all about. Some of them are far too vulgar to repeat.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the kind words.
ReplyDeleteThat actually occured. I better not use it in my wip or I will have a disgruntled client suing me. LOL
ReplyDeleteThanks, Denise. An actual client once said that (in a different context than used here), but he used the word in relation of a libel/ slander suit.
ReplyDeleteThank you for visiting.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting. That is a real word, used by an actual client (not in the same context as this exchange), but used in reference to a libel/slander suit.
ReplyDeleteReading this, it makes me wonder what he did... interesting exchange, it was fun to read.
ReplyDeleteWhat great dialogue! I could definitely hear both characters in my head, and I wouldn't want to get on the wrong side of either of them ha. The pics are excellent. Fun post!
ReplyDeleteSnappy dialogue. Sucked me right in.
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